Tim L.

I just have a question. The poem wasn't terrible, it wasn't great, either, as many people have said. I could sit here and tell you what to do with it ...

Alrighty. Let's get reviewin'. What we have here is a great idea, well-written on the whole with a few scattered errors. Now, as this is the most foreboding error, some ...

Okay, so I don't know what went wrong with some of the reviews here... First off, I enjoyed the piece. You can tell that you're comfortable writing from a different ...

I enjoyed the thinking behind this piece, but what we have here is a pretty common scenario: Great creative thinking, interesting plot, but needs more attention to craft and structure. ...

Hey Kyousuke! Now, I'm going to be honest here...although there are glimpses of writing talent within this piece, it still needs a lot of work. Cottonrulz was right in their ...

Ok so, lets review this story. I think you obviously know what I'm going to point out first. The first three chapters, what was up with those? I don't mean ...

That was really great man. It reminded me of sort of like George Orwell's 1984, which is kind of what I've been into lately, all that tyrannical government stuff. So ...

I don't really have much of a criticism for this. I thought you did an excellent job, and I think anything that was originally wrong with the poem has since ...

I agree with blackpencil. This was not, by any means, a bad poem. However your writing style is too slang-y. The only problem with that is, and this is not ...

I liked the concept of the poem, the whole being a soldier thing. I think if you threw in some more interesting vocabulary to make the whole intensity of being ...